In this blog post, you'll see all of my verbs again, however this time they will be separated into Active and Passive Voice. The active voice will be divided into 2 separate categories: specific for vivid and descriptive verbs, and then general for boring, non-descriptive verbs.
ACTIVE VOICE (GENERAL) ACTIVE VOICE (SPECIFIC) PASSIVE VOICE
-missing -broke -has been
- is defend -have come
- looking -contaminating -have been
-do -carrying -were created
-help -prove -was retracted
- does -attend -were vaccinated
- put -prohibit -were removed
-do - required -will lead
-could -improve -have made
- pass - support -are chosen
-help -signed -have opposed
-mean -claimed -have been
-can -agree -will lead
-pick -wanted -have put
-feel -recommends -were looking
-have -qualifies -have signed
- came -"grandfathering" -will become
- says -oppose -have become
- see -continue -has proven
-caused -disagree
-done -violated
- found -believe
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-do -questions
- are -decided
-put -discriminates
- have -practice
- notes -argues
- get -helping
- does -choosing
-wanted -support
-saying -signed
-realize
-continue
- taking
-force
-include
-decided
-repeal
-authored
-understand
-study
-explains
-failed
-aimed
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1. Looking at the breakdown of my verb choices here, what do I notice about my current draft? Are the actions in my piece mostly general, vague or non-specific? Are the actions mostly vivid and specific? Are there instances of passive voice? Summarize what I learned by analyzing my verb usage in this way.
I noticed that my current draft includes a good amount of specific active voice verbs. I think that this is important because instead of using boring verbs to explain something, the specific active voice verbs bring out emotion and a description of the scenario. There are also a good amount of general active voice verbs as well, however, it seems that the specific active voice verbs overpower those of the general category. I purposefully tried to include good choices of verbs in my piece because it brings a sense of energy to the document. So I think that the QRG includes a lot of vivid and specific verbs.
The instances where I included passive voice were describing things that happened in the past or are a descriptive verb of something that people do/have done/ are known to do in the past. I think that including all different types of verbs are important for the story to flow, however I think that specific active voice is the most important to include most frequently.
2. Based on this analysis, how could my use of verbs be improved overall in the project? Be specific and precise in explaining this.
I noticed that my current draft includes a good amount of specific active voice verbs. I think that this is important because instead of using boring verbs to explain something, the specific active voice verbs bring out emotion and a description of the scenario. There are also a good amount of general active voice verbs as well, however, it seems that the specific active voice verbs overpower those of the general category. I purposefully tried to include good choices of verbs in my piece because it brings a sense of energy to the document. So I think that the QRG includes a lot of vivid and specific verbs.
The instances where I included passive voice were describing things that happened in the past or are a descriptive verb of something that people do/have done/ are known to do in the past. I think that including all different types of verbs are important for the story to flow, however I think that specific active voice is the most important to include most frequently.
2. Based on this analysis, how could my use of verbs be improved overall in the project? Be specific and precise in explaining this.
I think that I could use a thesaurus more often for overused verbs. Especially those that are overused in the active specific voice. In order for the verb to be vivid and descriptive, it would really help enhance the use of the verb if it wasn't used as often. That would help to bring the emotions of the reader along without repetition of the same emotionless verb used throughout the document. I also think that I should try to remove as much passive voice from my document as possible, so that the flow of the verbage is good and not messy with transitions of too many different tenses.
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